I wrote this poem the other day and was proud of it, but hesitant to say anything... because sometimes you think that your work is brilliant and then you read it again and it's actually terrible, you know? Anyway, I brought it to workshop in my poetry class. My group loved it, which greatly pleased me; however, that's not why I was bouncing off the walls an hour after class ended. No guts, no glory right? I've got guts. I went up to my professor after class and asked him to look at it. This is a HUGE deal for me. He's 1) The best teacher I've ever had. Ever. EVER. And I kind of idolize him (for one, I'm going to be a teacher too!) 2) Brilliant, and has the most advanced vocabulary I've ever encountered. 3) Perfect. As far as I can tell. He said that he LOVED my poem and that it was EXCELLENT and the only suggestion he had was to remove one word he felt was unnecessary. He's an incredibly nice guy, but that was still really high praise coming from him. The poem? Here you are! Oh, and it's mine and you can't have it... in case you were considering plaigarism...
76.0, 75.2, 68.1, 66.4, 105.5, 83.2, 70.0
If a data point measured falls outside of reasonable
deviation from the mean, exclude said observation from calculations
You made an error.
Added too much acid. Titrated beyond the endpoint.
Discard.
3 comments:
Whoa I like that a lot. It feels very... Almost conversational and yet still you have to sit and read it a couple times and think about it before you really get the message. Props.
I really love the first two lines. You could go anywhere with them.
I like it Aly! I think that more scientists need to write poetry. The creative writing world is always in search of different 'perspectives', and we've got perspectives they could never dream of in the english department...
Keep it up, you!
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